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Post by Mr. Fountain on Tue Feb 03, 2015 1:09 am

Okay, this thread is just for archival purposes. Post nothing but tips, lessons, and general information about English and writing. If you have a story or bit of story that you want people to critique, you can either make your own thread for it or better yet post it in the other writing thread. I will delete posts in this thread if it isn't simply a tip, a lesson, or what-have-you.

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Hyphens

Post by Mr. Fountain on Tue Feb 03, 2015 10:42 pm

Hyphens




Hyphens:



  • Hyphens are a single dash (-) used to create compound words, like good-natured, or yellow-bellied. They can also be used to separate groups of numbers, such as a phone number (867-5309), and to attach a prefix or suffix to a word, like ex-husband or president-elect. Sometimes they are used to emphasize pronunciation, such as, “Oh, Hannah! That was GLOR-ius, hon-ey!”




En Dashes:


  • En dashes are also a single dash, but with a space before and after it ( - ). These are used to show a range between things, such as years (1865 - 1963), temperatures (70 - 80 degrees), months (June - August), even places (New York - San Francisco). Generally, anytime you would use a “to” or “through” to indicate a range. (“I’ll be out of town June through August.” “I’ll be out of town June - August.”)




Em Dashes:


  • Em dashes are a double dash (—) signify an interruption. They can be used to interrupt a sentence to interject related information (“One of the best things about Forestville in September—aside from the cooler weather—is that there aren’t many tourists.”)  They can also be used to indicate an interruption to dialogue:


"If I’ve told you once—"

"You’ve told me a thousand times, blah blah, I know."

Em dashes can also be used to show an omission (“Go to the store and talk to Mrs. S— about sending a letter to the town of M—.”) Sometimes interruptions and omissions end with a question mark. (“Isn’t the lack of tourists one of the best things about F—?” ”Haven’t I told you already that—?”)

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Words for Walking

Post by Mr. Fountain on Wed Feb 04, 2015 4:39 pm

Other Words for Walk:

  • Amble: walk easily and/or aimlessly

  • Bounce: walk energetically

  • Careen: pitch dangerously to one side while walking or running

  • Clump: walk heavily and/or clumsily

  • Falter: walk unsteadily

  • Flounder: walk with great difficulty

  • Foot it: (slang) depart or set off by walking

  • Footslog: walk heavily and firmly, as when weary, or through mud

  • Gimp: limp; hobble

  • Hike: take a long walk, especially in a park or a wilderness area

  • Hobble: walk unsteadily or with difficulty; see also limp

  • Hoof it: (slang) walk; see foot it

  • Leg it: (slang) see foot it

  • Limp: walk unsteadily because of injury, especially favoring one leg; see also falter

  • Lumber: walk slowly and heavily

  • Lurch: walk slowly but with sudden movements, or furtively

  • March: walk rhythmically alone or in a group, especially according to a specified procedure

  • Meander: walk or move aimlessly and idly without fixed direction

  • Mince: walk delicately

  • Mosey: see amble; also, used colloquially in the phrase “mosey along”

  • Nip: walk briskly or lightly; also used colloquially in the phrase “nip (on) over” to refer to a brief walk to a certain destination, as if on an errand

  • Pace: walk precisely to mark off a distance, or walk intently or nervously, especially back and forth

  • Pad: walk with steady steps making a soft dull sound

  • Parade: walk ostentatiously, as if to show off

  • Perambulate: see stroll; travel on foot, or walk to inspect or measure a boundary

  • Peregrinate: walk, especially to travel

  • Plod: walk slowly and heavily, as if reluctant or weary

  • Pound: walk or go with heavy steps; move along with force or vigor; see lumber

  • Power walk: walk briskly for fitness

  • Prance: walk joyfully, as if dancing or skipping

  • Promenade: go on a leisurely walk, especially in a public place as a social activity; see parade

  • Prowl: walk noiselessly and carefully in a predatory manner

  • Pussyfoot: walk stealthily or warily

  • Ramble: walk or travel aimlessly

  • Roam: go without fixed direction and without any particular destination, often for pleasure; see ramble

  • Rove: travel constantly over a relatively lengthy time period without a fixed destination; wander

  • Sashay: glide, move, or proceed easily or nonchalantly; seeparade

  • Saunter: walk about easily

  • Scuff: walk without lifting one’s feet

  • Shamble: walk or go awkwardly; shuffle; see scuff

  • Shuffle: walk without lifting the feet or with clumsy steps and a shambling gait; see scuff

  • Skulk: move in a stealthy or furtive manner

  • Somnambulate: walk in one’s sleep

  • Stagger: walk unsteadily

  • Stalk: walk stealthily, as in pursuit

  • Step: walk, or place one’s foot or feet in a new position

  • Stomp: walk heavily, as if in anger

  • Stride: walk purposefully, with long steps

  • Stroll: walk in a leisurely way; see saunter

  • Strut: walk with a stiff, erect, and apparently arrogant or conceited gait; see parade

  • Stumble: walk clumsily or unsteadily, or trip

  • Stump: walk heavily, as with a limp; see lumber

  • Swagger: walk with aggressive self-confidence

  • Tiptoe: walk carefully on the toes or on the balls of the foot, as if in stealth

  • Toddle: move with short, unsteady steps, as a young child; seesaunter and stagger

  • Totter: walk or go with faltering steps, as if from extreme weakness; see stagger (also, sway or become unstable)

  • Traipse: walk lightly and/or aimlessly

  • Tramp: walk heavily or noisily; see lumber and hike

  • Trample: walk so as to crush something underfoot

  • Traverse: walk across or over a distance

  • Tread: walk slowly and steadily

  • Trip: walk lightly; see also stumble

  • Tromp: tread heavily, especially to crush underfoot; see lumber

  • Troop: walk in unison, or collectively

  • Trot: proceed at a pace faster than a walk; see nip

  • Trudge: walk slowly and with heavy steps, typically because of exhaustion or harsh conditions; see plod

  • Waddle: walk clumsily or as if burdened, swinging the body

  • Wade: walk through water or with difficulty, as if impeded

  • Wander: to move from place to place without a fixed route; seeramble




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Colors

Post by Mr. Fountain on Wed Feb 04, 2015 4:49 pm

Other Words for Colors


Red
-Amaranth
-Auburn
-Burgundy
-Candy Apple
-Cardinal
-Carmine
-Carnelian
-Cerise
-Chestnut
-Coral
-Crimson
-Fuschia
-Lava
-Magenta
-Mahogany
-Maroon
-Puce
-Raspberry
-Red-violet
-Rose
-Ruby
-Scarlet
-Terracotta
-Vermillion
-Wine

Orange
-Amber
-Apricot
-Champagne
-Gamboge
-Peach
-Portland Orange
-Rust
-Safety Orange
-Tangerine
-Tawny
-Vermillion

Yellow
-Amber
-Beige
-Chartreuse
-Cream
-Ecru
-Flax
-Gold
-Goldenrod
-Harvest Gold
-Jasmine
-Khaki
-Lemon
-Maize
-Mustard
-Olive
-Peach
-Saffron
-Sage
-Straw
-Vanilla

Green
-Army Green
-Asparagus
-Blue-green
-Camoflauge Green
-Emerald
-Fern Green
-Forest Green
-Harlequin
-Hunter Green
-Jade
-Kelly Green
-Lime
-Moss
-Olive
-Pine Green
-Shamrock Green
-Spring Green
-Teal
-Turquoise
-Viridian

Blue
-Azure
-Baby Blue
-Carolina Blue
-Cornflower
-Cyan
-Electric Blue
-Indigo
-Iris
-Light Blue
-Midnight Blue
-Navy
-Oxford Blue
-Periwinkle
-Persian Blue
-Powder Blue
-Prussian Blue
-Royal Blue
-Sapphire
-Sky Blue
-Teal
-True Blue
-Turquoise
-Zaffre

Purple
-Byzantium
-Cerise
-Eggplant
-Fuchsia
-Iris
-Lavender
-Lilac
-Magenta
-Mauve
-Mulberry
-Orchid
-Periwinkle
-Plum
-Red-violet
-Violet

Brown
-Beige
-Bronze
-Burgundy
-Chestnut
-Chocolate
-Coffee
-Copper
-Khaki
-Mahogany
-Maroon
-Russet
-Rust
-Sepia
-Sienna
-Tan
-Taupe
-Tawny
-Umber
-Wheat


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Fighting Words and Profanity

Post by Mr. Fountain on Wed Feb 04, 2015 5:36 pm

Fighting Words and Profanity


Hitting

  • Blow (“landed a blow on”, “dealt a powerful blow”)
  • Box (“boxed his ears”)
  • Buffet
  • Chop
  • Cuff
  • Haymaker (used, “swung a haymaker”/”hit someone with a haymaker”)
  • Paste (slang, “I pasted her” means “I hit her hard.”)
  • Punch
  • Rabbit punch
  • Slap
  • Slug
  • Sock
  • Strike
  • Swat
  • Thump
  • Uppercut (usually, “landed an uppercut”)
  • Wallop

Kicking

  • Boot (“Booted his ribs”)
  • Donkey kick
  • Dropkick
  • Punt
  • Roundhouse

Other

  • Bash
  • Beat
  • Clash
  • Collide
  • Crash
  • Drive
  • Hammer
  • Impact
  • Recoil
  • Shove
  • Smash
  • Trip

I also did a page on words you can use in a sword fight. Many of them will be useful to a generic fighting scene as well.


Profanity

English profanity does not have any meaning. You can go in an English dictionary and look up the meanings of any of the following curse words. However, curse words in context don’t follow the dictionary definition. I’ll explain it again after the definitions:

  • Ass: butt, behind (mild curse word)
  • Bitch: an aggressive female; a jerk; an annoying person; a coward; someone who is submissive to another (mild curse word)
  • Crap: waste, poop (a milder version of shit) (mild)
  • Cunt: vagina; colloquially, a jerk, an awful woman; women sometimes use it among each other but for a man to call a woman a cunt is a big no-no in America. I’ve heard it’s a term of endearment on the Continent.
  • Fuck: to have sex with; rarely follows its dictionary definition
  • Hell: the bad place with the Devil (mild)
  • Shit: waste, poop

So it’s one thing to know the definition. It’s another thing to use them in context without sounding strange.
Ass
Ass generally follows its dictionary definition: if you see ass, chances are it’s referring to someone’s backside. Ass is a mild swearword (allowed on daytime TV in the states) and it’s a slightly offensive word for butt. It can also be used to indicate someone’s body (ex. saving your ass = saving you).
Some uses for ass:
Ass. By itself it can also mean an annoying, usually uptight or stubborn person, ex. “You’re such an ass.”
Asshat. A jerk. Pronounced “ass-hat”
Asshole. A jerk.
Badass. Someone who is really tough or awesome. 
Covering your ass. Protecting yourself, usually to the detriment of others.
Dumbass. Someone who is stupid.
(Fell) ass over teakettle. Indicating someone stumbled and fell.
Has zir head up zir ass. Said of people who refuse to change or listen to counsel.
Jackass. Idiot.
Kiss your ass goodbye. You will die.
Nice ass! Admiring someone’s butt in a crass manner.
Saving your ass. Saving someone.
Sitting with our thumbs up our asses. Not doing anything.
Smartass/wiseass. Someone who sasses off to everyone.
You can also use ass hyphenated with adjectives. Colloquially, it’s like using “very”. So if you have a “cool-ass car” then your car is “very cool”.
Bitch
Bitch has a several meanings, which I listed above. I’ll indicate each meaning for the phrase.
Bitch. A jerk, usually an aggressive or stubborn one.
Bitch. An impolite word for a woman. 
Bitch. To complain. “Quit your bitching!” means the same thing as “Stop complaining!” Often paired with “moan” to make the phrase “bitch and moan”, which also means to complain.
Bitchin’. Cool. “This is a bitchin’ club” means the same as “This is a cool club”
Son of a bitch. Can be used as an expression of frustration (“Son of a bitch!”) or as an offensive name (“You son of a bitch”), sometimes “You sorry son of a bitch”
Stop being such a (little) bitch. Don’t be so prissy or cowardly.
You’re my bitch. You belong to me, I own you.
Crap
Crap is the much milder sister of shit. You can use crap in public without drawing attention. Don’t use it in polite company. Your boss can tell you something is crap without it being offensive.
Crap! Simply used as expletive by itself.
Cut the crap. Stop lying to/deceiving/misleading me.
This is crap. It’s awful. 
Cunt
It’s only used by itself as an insult (for example, “What a cunt.” “Ze’s such a cunt.”) or as a rude word for vagina (“I’d like to grab her cunt.”)
Fuck
Fuck rarely follows its dictionary definition anymore. Just a warning.
Clusterfuck. A collection of things that have gone wrong. If there was a three-car pileup that caught on fire and exploded a gas station, that would be a clusterfuck.
For fuck’s sake. For the love of God, for God’s sake, oh my God
FUBAR. A military acronym meaning Fucked Up Beyond All Recognition. Pronounced “FOO-bahr”. Indicates something has gone wrong, ex. “This situation is FUBAR.”
Fuck! An expletive by itself.
Fuck. Someone who is stupid, incompetent, evil, or any other negative trait. Usually used with another adjective, e.g. “You dumb fuck.”
Fuck me. When used as an expletive, “Damn, I messed up.” Can be used as a come-on.
Fuck off. Go away.
Fuck you. I hate you.
Fuckin’ A. Great, amazing
I know fuck all about X. I don’t know anything about X
Mindfuck. Something that makes you think strangely or interrupts your way of thinking.
Motherfucker. Literally one who has sex with their mother. It’s almost never used in this context. The word has come to mean a jerk, an asshole, etc. Can also be used as an adjective in its form “motherfucking”, e.g. “Get these motherfucking snakes off this motherfucking plane” means “Get these snakes off my plane” with more emphasis.
Snafu. A military abbreviation (SNAFU) that passed into common usage. Pronounced “snah-foo”. Stands for Situation Normal All Fucked Up. Indicates something has gone wrong.
The fuck? Shortening for several questions, including, “What the fuck?” “How the fuck?” “Why the fuck?” etc.
To fuck. To do something incorrectly; to have sex with
To fuck over. To betray someone, to cheat someone.
To fuck up. To mess up, to screw up.
What the fuck? What is going on/What just happened?
More often, fuck is used as an amplifier. A fucking mess is worse than a mess, afucking terrible movie is worse than a terrible movie, etc. Fuck is also inserted in the middle of words for emphasis, like abso-fucking-lutely or Sher-fucking-lock or hell-fucking-yeah. And then you can add fuck to make weird curse words like fucktruck andfucknut, which generally mean “a jerk”.
Hell
Go to Hell. I hate you.
Hell if I know. I don’t know.
Hell on Earth. Chaos, widespread destruction.
Hell on wheels. A crazy driver.
Hell’s bells. An expletive. And also a good AC/DC song.
What the hell? What was that (for)?
When Hell freezes over. Never.
Piss
Piss off! Go away!
Pissed (off). Annoyed, angry.
Pissing in the wind. Doing something that will come back to haunt them later (much like peeing into the wind would cause the urine to hit you)
To piss off. To annoy, to anger.
Shit
Follows the same rules as crap, except shit is the more extreme version of the word.
Batshit crazy/insane. Crazy.
Bullshit. Impossible, not likely, unbelievable ridiculous, e.g. “This is bullshit!”
Don’t know shit. Doesn’t know anything 
Drives me apeshit. Bothers me.
Eat shit. Sometimes said, “Eat shit and die.” Means, “I hate you.” If someone is “forced/made to eat shit” or “ate shit” in front of a person/people, that means the person must say something they find distasteful. A racist forced to apologize to a minority would be eating shit.
Shit! An expletive by itself.
Shit-eating grin. A broad smile that displays self-satisfaction or smugness.
This is shit. This is awful.
You’re/What/That’s a piece of shit. You’re/that is awful.

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Re: Writing! Tips, lessons, and information.

Post by Mr. Fountain on Wed Feb 04, 2015 5:43 pm

More Words!

Appetite - 

craving, demand, gluttony, greed, hunger, inclination, insatiable, longing, lust, passion, ravenousness, relish, taste, thirst, urge, voracity, weakness, willingness, yearning, ardor, dedication, desire, devotion, enthusiasm, excitement, fervor, horny, intensity, keenness, wholeheartedness, zeal

Arouse - 

agitate, awaken, electrify, enliven, excite, entice, foment, goad, incite, inflame, instigate, kindle, provoke, rally, rouse, spark, stimulate, stir, thrill, waken, warm, whet, attract, charm, coax, fire up, fuel, heat up, lure, produce, stir up, tantalize, tease, tempt, thrum, torment, wind up, work up

Assault - 

attack, advancing, aggressive, assailing, charging, incursion, inundated, invasion, offensive, onset, onslaught, overwhelmed, ruinous, tempestuous, strike, violation, ambush, assail, barrage, bombard, bombardment, crackdown, wound

Beautiful - 

admirable, alluring, angelic, appealing, bewitching, charming, dazzling, delicate, delightful, divine, elegant, enticing, exquisite, fascinating, gorgeous, graceful, grand, magnificent, marvelous, pleasing, radiant, ravishing, resplendent, splendid, stunning, sublime, attractive, beguiling, captivating, enchanting, engaging, enthralling, eye-catching, fetching, fine, fine-looking, good-looking, handsome, inviting, lovely, mesmeric, mesmerizing, pretty, rakish, refined, striking, tantalizing, tempting

Brutal - 

atrocious, barbarous, bloodthirsty, callous, cruel, feral, ferocious, hard, harsh, heartless, inhuman, merciless, murderous, pitiless, remorseless, rough, rude, ruthless, savage, severe, terrible, unmerciful, vicious, bestial, brute, brutish, cold-blooded, fierce, gory, nasty, rancorous, sadistic, uncompromising, unfeeling, unforgiving, unpitying, violent, wild

Burly – 

able-bodied, athletic, beefy, big, brawny, broad-shouldered, bulky, dense, enormous, great, hard, hardy, hearty, heavily built, heavy, hefty, huge, husky, immense, large, massive, muscular, mighty, outsized, oversized, powerful, powerfully built, prodigious, robust, solid, stalwart, stocky, stout, strapping, strong, strongly built, sturdy, thick, thickset, tough, well-built, well-developed

Carnal - 

animalistic, bodily, impure, lascivious, lecherous, lewd, libidinous, licentious, lustful, physical, prurient, salacious, sensuous, voluptuous, vulgar, wanton, , coarse, crude, dirty, raunchy, rough, unclean

Dangerous - 

alarming, critical, fatal, formidable, impending, malignant, menacing, mortal, nasty, perilous, precarious, pressing, serious, terrible, threatening, treacherous, urgent, vulnerable, wicked, acute, damaging, deadly, death-defying, deathly, destructive, detrimental, explosive, grave, harmful, hazardous, injurious, lethal, life-threatening, noxious, poisonous, risky, severe, terrifying, toxic, unsafe, unstable, venomous

Dark - 

atrocious, corrupt, forbidding, foul, infernal, midnight, morbid, ominous, sinful, sinister, somber, threatening, twilight, vile, wicked, abject, alarming, appalling, baleful, bizarre, bleak, bloodcurdling, boding evil, chilling, cold, condemned, creepy, damned, daunting, demented, desolate, dire, dismal, disturbing, doomed, dour, dread, dreary, dusk, eerie, fear, fearsome, frightening, ghastly, ghostly, ghoulish, gloom, gloomy, grave, grim, grisly, gruesome, hair-raising, haunted, hideous, hopeless, horrendous, horrible, horrid, horrific, horrifying, horror, ill-fated, ill-omened, ill-starred, inauspicious, inhospitable, looming, lost, macabre, malice, malignant, menacing, murky, mysterious, night, panic, pessimistic, petrifying, scary, shadows, shadowy, shade, shady, shocking, soul-destroying, sour, spine-chilling, spine-tingling, strange, terrifying, uncanny, unearthly, unlucky, unnatural, unnerving, weird, wretched

Delicious -

enticing, exquisite, luscious, lush, rich, savory, sweet, tasty, tempting, appetizing, delectable, flavorsome, full of flavor, juicy, lip-smacking, mouth-watering, piquant, relish, ripe, salty, spicy, scrummy, scrumptious, succulent, tangy, tart, tasty, yummy, zesty

Ecstasy - 

delectation, delirium, elation, euphoria, fervor, frenzy, joy, rapture, transport, bliss, excitement, happiness, heaven, high, paradise, rhapsody, thrill, blissful, delighted, elated, extremely happy, in raptures (of delight), in seventh heaven, jubilant, on cloud nine, overexcited, overjoyed, rapturous, thrilled

Ecstatic - 

delirious, enraptured, euphoric, fervent, frenzied, joyous, transported, wild

Erotic - 

amatory, amorous, aphrodisiac, carnal, earthy, erogenous, fervid, filthy, hot, impassioned, lascivious, lecherous, lewd, raw, romantic, rousing, salacious, seductive, sensual, sexual, spicy, steamy, stimulating, suggestive, titillating, voluptuous, tantalizing

Gasp - 

catch of breath, choke, gulp, heave, inhale, pant, puff, snort, wheeze, huff, rasp, sharp intake of air, short of breath, struggle for breath, swallow, winded 

Heated -

ardent, avid, excited, fervent, fervid, fierce, fiery, frenzied, furious, impassioned, intense, passionate, raging, scalding, scorched, stormy, tempestuous, vehement, violent, ablaze, aflame, all-consuming, blazing, blistering, burning, crazed, explosive, febrile, feverish, fired up, flaming, flushed, frantic, hot, hot-blooded, impatient, incensed, maddening, obsessed, possessed, randy, searing, sizzling, smoldering, sweltering, torrid, turbulent, volatile, worked up, zealous

Hunger - 

appetite, ache, craving, gluttony, greed, longing, lust, mania, mouth-watering, ravenous, voracious, want, yearning, thirst

Hungry - 

avid, carnivorous, covetous, craving, eager, greedy, hungered, rapacious, ravenous, starved, unsatisfied, voracious, avaricious, desirous, famished, grasping, insatiable, keen, longing, predatory, ravening, starving, thirsty, wanting

Intense - 

forceful, severe, passionate, acute, agonizing, ardent, anxious, biting, bitter, burning, close, consuming, cutting, deep, eager, earnest, excessive, exquisite, extreme, fervent, fervid, fierce, forcible, great, harsh, impassioned, keen, marked, piercing, powerful, profound, severe, sharp, strong, vehement, violent, vivid, vigorous

Liquid - 

damp, cream, creamy, dripping, ichorous, juicy, moist, luscious, melted, moist, pulpy, sappy, soaking, solvent, sopping, succulent, viscous, wet / aqueous, broth, elixir, extract, flux, juice, liquor, nectar, sap, sauce, secretion, solution, vitae, awash, moisture, boggy, dewy, drenched, drip, drop, droplet, drowning, flood, flooded, flowing, fountain, jewel, leaky, milky, overflowing, saturated, slick, slippery, soaked, sodden, soggy, stream, swamp, tear, teardrop, torrent, waterlogged, watery, weeping

Lithe -

agile, lean, pliant, slight, spare, sinewy, slender, supple, deft, fit, flexible, lanky, leggy, limber, lissom, lissome, nimble, sinuous, skinny, sleek, slender, slim, svelte, trim, thin, willowy, wiry

Moan -

beef, cry, gripe, grouse, grumble, lament, lamentation, plaint, sob, wail, whine, bemoan, bewail, carp, deplore, grieve, gripe, grouse, grumble, keen, lament, sigh, sob, wail, whine, mewl

Moving - 

(exciting,) affecting, effective  arousing, awakening, breathless, dynamic, eloquent, emotional, emotive, expressive, fecund, far-out, felt in gut, grabbed by, gripping, heartbreaking, heartrending, impelling, impressive, inspirational, meaningful, mind-bending, mind-blowing, motivating, persuasive, poignant, propelling, provoking, quickening, rallying, rousing, significant, stimulating, simulative, stirring, stunning, touching, awe-inspiring, energizing, exhilarating, fascinating, heart pounding, heart stopping, inspiring, riveting, thrilling

Need - 

compulsion, demand, desperate, devoir, extremity, impatient longing, must, urge, urgency / desire, appetite, avid, burn, craving, eagerness, fascination, greed, hunger, insatiable, longing, lust, taste, thirst, voracious, want, yearning, ache, addiction, aspiration, desire, fever, fixation, hankering, hope, impulse, inclination, infatuation, itch, obsession, passion, pining, wish, yen

Pain - 

ache, afflict, affliction, agony, agonize, anguish, bite, burn, chafe, distress, fever, grief, hurt, inflame, laceration, misery, pang, punish, sting, suffering, tenderness, throb, throe, torment, torture, smart

Painful - 

aching, agonizing, arduous, awful, biting, burning, caustic, dire, distressing, dreadful, excruciating, extreme, grievous, inflamed, piercing, raw, sensitive, severe, sharp, tender, terrible, throbbing, tormenting, angry, bleeding, bloody, bruised, cutting, hurting, injured, irritated, prickly, skinned, smarting, sore, stinging, unbearable, uncomfortable, upsetting, wounded

Perverted - 

aberrant, abnormal, corrupt, debased, debauched, defiling, depraved, deviant, monstrous, tainted, twisted, vicious, warped, wicked, abhorrent, base, decadent, degenerate, degrading, dirty, disgusting, dissipated, dissolute, distasteful, hedonistic, immodest, immoral, indecent, indulgent, licentious, nasty, profligate, repellent, repugnant, repulsive, revolting, shameful, shameless, sickening, sinful, smutty, sordid, unscrupulous, vile 

Pleasurable - 

charming, gratifying, luscious, satisfying, savory, agreeable, delicious, delightful, enjoyable, nice, pleasant, pleasing, soothing, succulent

Pleasure - 

bliss, delight, gluttony, gratification, relish, satisfaction, thrill, adventure, amusement, buzz, contentment, delight, desire, ecstasy, enjoyment, excitement, fun, happiness, harmony, heaven, joy, kick, liking, paradise, seventh heaven 

Rapacious- 

avaricious, ferocious, furious, greedy, predatory, ravening, ravenous, savage, voracious, aggressive, gluttonous, grasping, insatiable, marauding, plundering

Rapture - 

bliss, ecstasy, elation, exaltation, glory, gratification, passion, pleasure, floating, unbridled joy

Rigid - 

adamant, austere, definite, determined, exact, firm, hard, rigorous, solid, stern, uncompromising, unrelenting, unyielding, concrete, fixed, harsh, immovable, inflexible, obstinate, resolute, resolved, severe, steadfast, steady, stiff, strong, strict, stubborn, taut, tense, tight, tough, unbending, unchangeable, unwavering

Sudden - 

abrupt, accelerated, acute, fast, flashing, fleeting, hasty, headlong, hurried, immediate, impetuous, impulsive, quick, quickening, rapid, rash, rushing, swift, brash, brisk, brusque, instant, instantaneous, out of the blue, reckless, rushed, sharp, spontaneous, urgent, without warning

Thrust - 

(forward) advance, drive, forge, impetus, impulsion, lunge, momentum, onslaught, poke, pressure, prod, propulsion, punch, push, shove, power, proceed, progress, propel

(push hard) assail, assault, attack, bear down, buck, drive, force, heave, impale, impel, jab, lunge, plunge, press, pound, prod, ram, shove, stab, transfix, urge, bang, burrow, cram, gouge, jam, pierce, punch, slam, spear, spike, stick

Thunder-struck -

amazed, astonished, aghast, astounded, awestruck, confounded, dazed, dazed, dismayed, overwhelmed, shocked, staggered, startled, stunned, gob-smacked, bewildered, dumbfounded, flabbergasted, horrified, incredulous, surprised, taken aback 

Torment -

agony, anguish, hurt, misery, pain, punishment, suffering, afflict, angst, conflict, distress, grief, heartache, misfortune, nightmare, persecute, plague, sorrow, strife, tease, test, trial, tribulation, torture, turmoil, vex, woe

Touch - 

(physical) - blow, brush, caress, collide, come together, contact, converge, crash, cuddle, embrace, feel, feel up, finger, fondle, frisk, glance, glide, graze, grope, handle, hit, hug, impact, join, junction, kiss, lick, line, manipulate, march, massage, meet, nudge, palm, partake, pat, paw, peck, pet, pinch, probe, push, reach, rub, scratch, skim, slide, smooth, strike, stroke, suck, sweep, tag, tap, taste, thumb, tickle, tip, touching, toy, bite, bump, burrow, buss, bury, circle, claw, clean, clutch, cover, creep, crush, cup, curl, delve, dig, drag, draw, ease, edge, fiddle with, flick, flit, fumble, grind, grip, grub, hold, huddle, knead, lap, lave, lay a hand on, maneuver, manhandle, mash, mold, muzzle, neck, nestle, nibble, nip, nuzzle, outline, play, polish, press, pull, rasp, ravish, ream, rim, run, scoop, scrabble, scrape, scrub, shave, shift, shunt, skate, slip, slither, smack, snake, snuggle, soothe, spank, splay, spread, squeeze, stretch, swipe, tangle, tease, thump, tongue, trace, trail, tunnel twiddle, twirl, twist, tug, work, wrap 

(mental) - communicate, examine, inspect, perception, scrutinize

Wet -

bathe, bleed, burst, cascade, course, cover, cream, damp, dampen, deluge, dip, douse, drench, dribble, drip, drizzle, drool, drop, drown, dunk, erupt, flood, flow, gush, immerse, issue, jet, leach, leak, moisten, ooze, overflow, permeate, plunge, pour, rain, rinse, run, salivate, saturate, secrete, seep, shower, shoot, slaver, slobber, slop, slosh, sluice, spill, soak, souse, spew, spit, splash, splatter, spout, spray, sprinkle, spurt, squirt, steep, stream, submerge, surge, swab, swamp, swill, swim, trickle, wash, water

Wicked - 

abominable, amoral, atrocious, awful, base, barbarous, dangerous, debased, depraved, distressing, dreadful, evil, fearful, fiendish, fierce, foul, heartless, hazardous, heinous, immoral, indecent, intense, mean, nasty, naughty, nefarious, offensive, profane, scandalous, severe, shameful, shameless, sinful, terrible, unholy, vicious, vile, villainous, wayward, bad, criminal, cruel, deplorable, despicable, devious, ill-intentioned, impious, impish, iniquitous, irreverent, loathsome, Machiavellian, mad, malevolent, malicious, merciless, mischievous, monstrous, perverse, ruthless, spiteful, uncaring, unkind, unscrupulous, vindictive, virulent, wretched

Writhe - 

agonize, bend, jerk, recoil, lurch, plunge, slither, squirm, struggle, suffer, thrash, thresh, twist, wiggle, wriggle, angle, arc, bow, buck, coil, contort, convulse, curl, curve, fidget, fight, flex, go into spasm, grind, heave, jiggle, jolt, kick, rear, reel, ripple, resist, roll, lash, lash out, screw up, shake, shift, slide, spasm, stir, strain, stretch, surge, swell, swivel, thrust, turn violently, tussle, twitch, undulate, warp, worm, wrench, wrestle, yank 

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PLANT SYMBOLISM

A

  • Almond – monetary prosperity
  • Aloe – healing, protection; grief, bitterness
  • Alstroemeria – aspiring
  • Alyssum – calms anger
  • Amaryllis – drama
  • Anemone – health, healing
  • Angelica – inspiration; magic
  • Apple – love; healing
  • Arbor vitae – eternal friendship
  • Aspen – eloquence
  • Aster – love
  • Amaryllis – pride
  • Azalea – abundance


B

  • Baby’s breath – festivity
  • Bachelor’s button – anticipation
  • Bamboo – strength and grace; breaker of hexes or spells
  • Basil – good wishes
  • Bay – glory, honor, reward
  • Bayberry – illusion, appearance
  • Beech – wishes; ancient knowledge
  • Bellflower – gratitude
  • Begonia – beware
  • Black-eyed Susan – encouragement; justice
  • Bleeding heart – unrequited love
  • Bloodroot – healing, strength, growth
  • Bluebell – gratitude
  • Boneset – fixing, mending, strengthening
  • Butterfly weed – transformation, rebirth

C

  • Cactus – endurance, adaptability; chastity
  • Calendula – joy; remembrance, grief
  • Calla lily – beauty
  • Candytuft – indifference
  • Catnip – deception, paradox
  • Cattail – balance, stability
  • Cardamom – lust
  • Cedar – protection, warding
  • Chamomile – patience, long life, wisdom
  • Chives – usefulness
  • Chrysanthemum (white) – truth
  • Chrysanthemum (yellow) – secret admirer; slighted love
  • Cinquefoil – protection; sleep
  • Clover – industrious; hardworking
  • Clover (white) – think of me
  • Columbine – desertion
  • Comfrey – safe travels
  • Coriander – hidden worth, healing
  • Cowslip – treasure finding
  • Cumin – fidelity
  • Crocus – youth; foresight
  • Cypress – mourning

CARNATION

  • Carnation – marriage, betrothal (China)
  • Pink – gratitude
  • Red – flashy; sorrow
  • Striped – refusal
  • White – remembrance
  • Yellow – cheerful

D

  • Daffodil – regard; chivalry
  • Dahlia – dignity
  • Daisy – innocence, hope
  • Dandelion – faithfulness, happiness
  • Daylily – coquetry
  • Delphinium – boldness
  • Devil’s shoestring – gambling; luck
  • Dianthus – dignity, woman’s love
  • Dill – power against evil, preservation; lust
  • Dogwood – durability, love in the face of adversity; charm

E

  • Edelweiss – courage, devotion
  • Elder – bad luck, zealousness
  • Elm – shadows, darkness

F

  • Fennel – flattery, worthy of praise
  • Fern – sincerity
  • Forget-me-not – take a wild guess
  • Forsythia – anticipation
  • Foxglove – protection
  • Freesia – spirited

G

  • Gardenia – purity; joy
  • Garlic – protection, strength, healing
  • Gayfeather – I will try again
  • Geranium – friendship; comfort
  • Ginger – pride
  • Gladiolus – strength of character
  • Goldenrod – encouragement
  • Grass – submission, usefulness

H

  • Hawthorn – heals broken hearts; associated with fairies
  • Heather – solitude
  • Heather (pink) – good luck
  • Heather (purple) – admiration, beauty
  • Heather (white) – protection
  • Heliotrope – eternal love; prophecy
  • Hibiscus – delicate beauty
  • Holly – hope
  • Hollyhock – ambition
  • Honeysuckle – love
  • Horehound – health
  • Hortensia – heartlessness
  • Hyacinth – fidelity, fertility; sincerity
  • Hydrangea – frigidity, heartlessness
  • Hyssop – sacrifice

I

  • Iris – wisdom, faith, valor; inspiration
  • Irish moss – money; luck
  • Ivy – friendship, continuity

J

  • Jasmine – grace, elegance
  • Jasmine (white) – love

K

  • Knotgrass – health

L

  • Lady’s mantle – comfort
  • Lantana – rigor
  • Larkspur – beautiful spirit
  • Lathyrus – friendship; courage; shyness
  • Lavender – devotion, virtue; distrust
  • Lemon balm – sympathy
  • Liatris – apology
  • Lilac – youth; first love
  • Lily – purity, chastity
  • Lily-of-the-valley – return of happiness; contentment
  • Lisianthus – calming
  • Lobelia – arrogance, malevolence
  • Lungwort – value
  • Lupine – imagination

M

  • Magnolia – nobility; dignity
  • Mandrake – cursing; negativity
  • Maple – success, abundance
  • Marigold – cruelty, jealousy; desire for wealth
  • Marigold (pot) – grief
  • Marjoram – joy, happiness
  • Mint – virtue; refreshment
  • Monkshood – chivalry
  • Morning glory – affection
  • Mugwort – clumsiness, awkwardness, ugliness
  • Mustard – indifference
  • Myrrh – power, strength, vitality

N

  • Narcissus – egotism
  • Nasturtium – patriotism; victory in battle
  • Nightshade – deception, death, danger

O

  • Oak – strength
  • Oleander – majesty; deadly beauty
  • Orchid – love; children; perfection
  • Orange – fertility
  • Oregano – substance; improved luck

P

  • Palm – success; victory
  • Pansy – thoughtfulness; meditation
  • Parsley – festivity, joy, victory
  • Pennyroyal – majesty; nobility
  • Periwinkle – love, lust, intelligence
  • Petunia – anger, resentment
  • Peony – protection
  • Phlox – agreement
  • Pincushion – unfortunate love
  • Pine – humility
  • Poppy (red) – consolation
  • Primrose – protection, love, youth
  • Primrose (yellow) – hunting

Q

  • Queen Anne’s Lace – delicate femininity

R

  • Ragweed – courage
  • Ranunculus – radiance
  • Rhododendron – beware
  • Rosemary – remembrance; loyalty; love
  • Rue – grace, clarity

ROSES

  • Blue – mystery
  • Orange – desire; enthusiasm
  • Pink – affection; grace; elegance; appreciation
  • Purple – love at first sight; glory
  • Red – passion; love
  • White – innocence, purity, new beginnings; honor; remembrance
  • Yellow – joy, friendship; jealousy

S

  • Saffron – beware of success
  • Sage – wisdom, immortality
  • Sagebrush – purification, exorcism
  • Salvia (blue) – thinking of you
  • Salvia (red) – forever mine
  • Sassafras – foundation, considered choices
  • Savory – interest
  • Snapdragon – deception; presumptuousness
  • Sorrel – affection
  • Southernwood – humor, constancy
  • Speedwell – fidelity
  • Star of Bethlehem – hope
  • Statice – success
  • Stephanotis – good luck
  • Stonecrop – tranquility
  • Sunflower – infatuation; foolish passion
  • Sweet pea – pleasure; shyness
  • Sweet William – gallantry
  • Sweet woodruff – humility

T

  • Tansy – hostility
  • Tarragon – lasting interest
  • Thistle – hardiness, protection
  • Thyme – courage, strength, bravery
  • Tickseed – cheerfulness
  • Tiger lily – pride
  • Tuberose – pleasure

TULIP

  • Pink – caring
  • Purple – royalty
  • Red – love
  • White – forgiveness
  • Yellow – hopelessly in love

V

  • Valerian – readiness
  • Violet – loyalty, devotion

W

  • Willow – sorrow
  • Willow (green) – false love
  • Wisteria – steadfast

Y

  • Yarrow – eternal love; good health
  • Yew – immortality; sorrow
  • Yucca – opportunity

Z

  • Zinnia – thinking of absent friends

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Post by Mr. Fountain on Wed Feb 04, 2015 6:05 pm

Writing the Magnificent Bastard


  1. They need to know their target. A phlegmatic pawn isn’t going to rush headlong into a trap, but they might be overcautious when they should be pressing ahead. The MB might accomplish this by befriending their pawn, reading their works/watching them constantly, or planting a spy close to the pawn. 

  2. Deception, deception, deception. A MB is rarely truthful to anyone about the gambit they are running — in part because the plan relies on secrecy and in part because the target of their gambit isn’t likely to play nice if they knew. To that end, the MB should spend half of their time planning and half deflecting blame away from them. The MB will probably be a master at compartmentalization and lying. 

  3. Manipulation. The whole point of the Magnificent Bastard is that they use other people to do their dirty work. The MB has to convince people to do their work to begin with. This means they need to be likable — even sociable — or at least have people on their payroll who have those traits. If befriending someone to accomplish your ends isn’t apparent, use bait. MBs often suggest to the pawn that their path leads to the fulfillment of desires. This serves as bait to obscure the pawn from the MB’s true ends, e.g. Loki satisfied Thor’s need for justice by bringing him to Jotunheim to piss off the Frost Giants, which made Thor an exile and put Loki in line for the throne.

  4. Contingencies. A MB cannot rely on just one plan. Plans often go wrong. A Magnificent Bastard need several plans that will correct any issues that disrupt the main plan. The sacrifice dies? Have their blood relative. You’re infected with the virus? Use yourself as a walking pathological weapon to escape alive. Not all of these plan need to be planned. MBs can often come up with them on the fly, although on the fly plans should be less likely to succeed than premeditated ones.

  5. Luck vs. Skill. You as an author need to tip the scales in favor of skill. No one likes a MB whose success runs entirely on luck. Luck can be involved, but it cannot play a significant role in a victory. That goes double if your MB is the protagonist. Your protagonist(s) must succeed through their own efforts. Villains are allowed to have more luck, especially during the first half of the story, but even a hero duped by a MB should have had something to do with their own downfall. If you absolutely must use luck, make it a side plot or a minor victory, not the climax of the work.

  6. Spanner in the works (Click Here). So far, it seems like being a Magnificent Bastard is all about capitalizing on people’s flaws and desires, and waiting until they mess up in your favor. IRL, it’s a lot more complicated than that. People, nations, animals, and whatever else the MB is manipulating change. The MB cannot possibly foresee every single interaction or experience their pawns will experience or predict how it will change them. They cannot possibly foresee trillions of tiny details like someone half-filling their tank or choosing to wear a necklace that can disrupt their plan. Ergo, if you’re writing a really realistic MB, I suggest you let them mess up a lot more than many authors allow them to. 


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I found this a while back. http://i.imgur.com/bcYH8ob.jpg
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Post by Mr. Fountain on Sun Apr 19, 2015 2:43 am

I thought that this one was particularly interesting.

The Number of Words and Timing

The number of words you use between two events gives your readers a rough idea of how much time occurs between them. This means that if you want to tell your readers that one event happens right another with no pause, it’s a bad idea to say that between the two events.

Good:
“Do you love me?” asked Maria.
“Yes,” said Tyrone, without hesitation.

Not so good:
“Do you love me?” asked Maria.
Tyrone didn’t hesitate. “Yes.”

In the second one, the time it takes to read “Tyrone didn’t hesitate” makes the reader feel like Tyrone is actually hesitating.

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Post by Megantron on Mon Jun 29, 2015 3:30 pm

Sometimes, I find it best to force yourself to sit down and write something... anything that comes to your head.

Even if it seems silly or really shitty, don't worry about that now. Just knock out 1,000 words or so.

There are a couple websites and apps that help cater to this idea of writing daily.

Once that comes to mind if http://750words.com/

I used to be a very avid writer back in high school, but now I cannot seem to find the time, motivation, or creativity as I once had.

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Post by Mr. Fountain on Wed Apr 13, 2016 2:12 pm

Gary Provost's lesson on varying sentence length to create rhythm and flow:

This sentence has five words. Here are five more words. Five-word sentences are fine. But several together become monotonous. Listen to what is happening. The writing is getting boring. The sound of it drones. It’s like a stuck record. The ear demands some variety. Now listen. I vary the sentence length, and I create music. Music. The writing sings. It has a pleasant rhythm, a lilt, a harmony. I use short sentences. And I use sentences of medium length. And sometimes, when I am certain the reader is rested, I will engage him with a sentence of considerable length, a sentence that burns with energy and builds with all the impetus of a crescendo, the roll of the drums, the crash of the cymbals–sounds that say listen to this, it is important.

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Post by Mr. Fountain on Wed Apr 13, 2016 2:16 pm

A lesson from Chuck Palahniuk:

In six seconds, you’ll hate me. But in six months, you’ll be a better writer.
From this point forward—at least for the next half year—you may not use “thought” verbs. These include: Thinks, Knows, Understands, Realizes, Believes, Wants, Remembers, Imagines, Desires, and a hundred others you love to use.
The list should also include: Loves and Hates. And it should include: Is and Has, but we’ll get to those later.
Until some time around Mercenary Day, you can’t write: Kenny wondered if Monica didn’t like him going out at night…”
Instead, you’ll have to Un-pack that to something like: “The mornings after Kenny had stayed out, beyond the last bus, until he’d had to bum a ride or pay for a cab and got home to find Monica faking sleep, faking because she never slept that quiet, those mornings, she’d only put her own cup of coffee in the microwave. Never his.”
Instead of characters knowing anything, you must now present the details that allow the reader to know them. Instead of a character wanting something, you must now describe the thing so that the reader wants it.
Instead of saying: “Adam knew Gwen liked him.” You’ll have to say: “Between classes, Gwen had always leaned on his locker when he’d go to open it. She’s roll her eyes and shove off with one foot, leaving a black-heel mark on the painted metal, but she also left the smell of her perfume. The combination lock would still be warm from her butt. And the next break, Gwen would be leaned there, again.”
In short, no more short-cuts. Only specific sensory detail: action, smell, taste, sound, and feeling.
Typically, writers use these “thought” verbs at the beginning of a paragraph (In this form, you can call them “Thesis Statements” and I’ll rail against those, later). In a way, they state the intention of the paragraph. And what follows, illustrates them.
For example: “Brenda knew she’d never make the deadline. Traffic was backed up from the bridge, past the first eight or nine exits. Her cell phone battery was dead. At home, the dogs would need to go out, or there would be a mess to clean up. Plus, she’d promised to water the plants for her neighbor…”
Do you see how the opening “thesis statement” steals the thunder of what follows? Don’t do it.
If nothing else, cut the opening sentence and place it after all the others. Better yet, transplant it and change it to: Brenda would never make the deadline.
Thinking is abstract. Knowing and believing are intangible. Your story will always be stronger if you just show the physical actions and details of your characters and allow your reader to do the thinking and knowing. And loving and hating.
Don’t tell your reader: “Lisa hated Tom.”
Instead, make your case like a lawyer in court, detail by detail.
Present each piece of evidence. For example: “During roll call, in the breath after the teacher said Tom’s name, in that moment before he could answer, right then, Lisa would whisper-shout ‘Butt Wipe,’ just as Tom was saying, ‘Here’.”
One of the most-common mistakes that beginning writers make is leaving their characters alone. Writing, you may be alone. Reading, your audience may be alone. But your character should spend very, very little time alone. Because a solitary character starts thinking or worrying or wondering.
For example: Waiting for the bus, Mark started to worry about how long the trip would take…”
A better break-down might be: “The schedule said the bus would come by at noon, but Mark’s watch said it was already 11:57. You could see all the way down the road, as far as the Mall, and not see a bus. No doubt, the driver was parked at the turn-around, the far end of the line, taking a nap. The driver was kicked back, asleep, and Mark was going to be late. Or worse, the driver was drinking, and he’d pull up drunk and charge Mark seventy-five cents for death in a fiery traffic accident…”
A character alone must lapse into fantasy or memory, but even then you can’t use “thought” verbs or any of their abstract relatives.
Oh, and you can just forget about using the verbs forget and remember.
No more transitions such as: “Wanda remembered how Nelson used to brush her hair.”
Instead: “Back in their sophomore year, Nelson used to brush her hair with smooth, long strokes of his hand.”
Again, Un-pack. Don’t take short-cuts.
Better yet, get your character with another character, fast. Get them together and get the action started. Let their actions and words show their thoughts. You—stay out of their heads.
And while you’re avoiding “thought” verbs, be very wary about using the bland verbs “is” and “have.”
For example: “Ann’s eyes are blue.”
“Ann has blue eyes.”
Versus:
“Ann coughed and waved one hand past her face, clearing the cigarette smoke from her eyes, blue eyes, before she smiled…”
Instead of bland “is” and “has” statements, try burying your details of what a character has or is, in actions or gestures. At its most basic, this is showing your story instead of telling it.
And forever after, once you’ve learned to Un-pack your characters, you’ll hate the lazy writer who settles for: “Jim sat beside the telephone, wondering why Amanda didn’t call.”
Please. For now, hate me all you want, but don’t use thought verbs. After Mercenary Day, go crazy, but I’d bet money you won’t.

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